Monday, November 16, 2009

CHRISTMAS HELP!!!!!!!!!! please please help!!!!!!?

Okay so i am writing a poem for my mom and dad for xmas ...and here is the ending part of it ...but i don't know what to put after "so lets get together and what ??????" Please help ...thanks !





Flurries are falling, Sidewalks are white


bells are jingling, christmas is tonight


I smile, because we are all together


happily, merrily, it couldn't be any better





Its the most wonderful time of the year


being with family and having good cheer


I can't wait till next year


so lets all get together ......?????????????? %26lt;%26lt;%26lt;%26lt;HELP???

CHRISTMAS HELP!!!!!!!!!! please please help!!!!!!?
Keep the rhyme scheme the same from the first to the second stanza. Basically you have


A


A


B


B





So in the second one, change that "I can't wait til next year" b/c it is way shorter than the other lines and messes up your rhyme. Then your last "lets all get together" can rhyme with something different. Consider something about why you love being with the family or the love you have for each other.
Reply:''without any fear'' LOL





or





''because THEE time is here''





or ''because that special time is here''
Reply:and cheer!
Reply:I think that part of the problem is that in the first stanza, you have rhymed the first two lines and the second two lines. In the second stanza, so far, all the lines rhyme. So, I have rewritten your last two lines. If you like it, great, if not, no hurt feelings.








Its the most wonderful time of the year


Being with family and having good cheer


Can't think of a place I'd rather be


Because you mean the world to me
Reply:..and feed the reindeer?
Reply:And enjoy merry weather??
Reply:and crack open a beer?


spread some good cheer?


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